curryking1
07-20-2007, 01:19 AM
1. Spelling
Wounding you silly man. I think you are Gary Chaney :)
This post isn't entirely directed at you btw. Only using this because this happened to be the example I found when I quickly grazed the front page.
Read this... this was the first sentence to the DMC4 preview.
Devil May Cry 4 was available for play at the Barker Hanger...
I've skimmed a few every now and then and most of the time I find some really glaring spelling or grammatical errors.
2. Word Usage
I dunno, maybe this is just me, but when I read the stuff posted on the front page I think you guys are using complex words just for the sake of using complex words so the sentence sounds sophisticated. Maybe yes, maybe no, but I think that's what's happening and my suggestion would be to stop doing that as....
To be honest I find it really difficult to read the previews. To me, they do not flow very well, and the word choice to me is really poor, no offense.
3. Paragraphs
Maybe it's just the thin margins you guys are using but I really feel like I'm looking at a big wall of text and I almost feel overwhelmed when I try to read the stuff up there.
4. Being Brief
This might be part of point three, but I'm thinking some things said need to be more brief, flow better, and some small things that break up a good reading pattern should just not be said at all. Maybe if there's small little things that you guys want to mention, they could be mentioned through some bullet points or some kind of 'epilogue' or 'synopsis' at the end (I dunno the right word lol).
These are probably pretty basic, elementary suggestions that teachers would tell kids in highschool, but I dunno, I felt maybe I should just mention it. I'm kind of wondering about the image of the site on a professional level, and I think the articles are what would be heavily reflecting how professional the site is or can be.
Maybe E-mpire and PSINext could major as being a forum and a site that people look to for great articles? Lol :P
But I think there is lots of room for improvement on the articles for the front page. My favourite reads come from Eurogamer and I think they do a lot of awesome writing, so maybe you guys could look there for tips on writing :)
And then again, I'm no English master, so I'm not claiming to really know anything, this is just how I feel about the articles on the front page. I'm just being a visionary, but I think the articles can be a real representation of how serious you guys want to be the E-mpire to become an empire ya know? I'm rooting for you guys just so you know :)
http://psinsider.e-mpire.com/styles/psinext/images/header.jpg
Awesome graphic btw :)
Wounding you silly man. I think you are Gary Chaney :)
This post isn't entirely directed at you btw. Only using this because this happened to be the example I found when I quickly grazed the front page.
Read this... this was the first sentence to the DMC4 preview.
Devil May Cry 4 was available for play at the Barker Hanger...
I've skimmed a few every now and then and most of the time I find some really glaring spelling or grammatical errors.
2. Word Usage
I dunno, maybe this is just me, but when I read the stuff posted on the front page I think you guys are using complex words just for the sake of using complex words so the sentence sounds sophisticated. Maybe yes, maybe no, but I think that's what's happening and my suggestion would be to stop doing that as....
To be honest I find it really difficult to read the previews. To me, they do not flow very well, and the word choice to me is really poor, no offense.
3. Paragraphs
Maybe it's just the thin margins you guys are using but I really feel like I'm looking at a big wall of text and I almost feel overwhelmed when I try to read the stuff up there.
4. Being Brief
This might be part of point three, but I'm thinking some things said need to be more brief, flow better, and some small things that break up a good reading pattern should just not be said at all. Maybe if there's small little things that you guys want to mention, they could be mentioned through some bullet points or some kind of 'epilogue' or 'synopsis' at the end (I dunno the right word lol).
These are probably pretty basic, elementary suggestions that teachers would tell kids in highschool, but I dunno, I felt maybe I should just mention it. I'm kind of wondering about the image of the site on a professional level, and I think the articles are what would be heavily reflecting how professional the site is or can be.
Maybe E-mpire and PSINext could major as being a forum and a site that people look to for great articles? Lol :P
But I think there is lots of room for improvement on the articles for the front page. My favourite reads come from Eurogamer and I think they do a lot of awesome writing, so maybe you guys could look there for tips on writing :)
And then again, I'm no English master, so I'm not claiming to really know anything, this is just how I feel about the articles on the front page. I'm just being a visionary, but I think the articles can be a real representation of how serious you guys want to be the E-mpire to become an empire ya know? I'm rooting for you guys just so you know :)
http://psinsider.e-mpire.com/styles/psinext/images/header.jpg
Awesome graphic btw :)